Dan
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Post by Dan on Apr 18, 2009 20:57:43 GMT -5
I wrote three haikus for a project and I need to be sure that they're true haikus. Your help would be greatly appreciated.
The wind blows with strength And the trees bend low beneath. They bend, but not break.
The Rain falls in floods And the dry ground is drowning, Crying for parting clouds.
The sun lifts its head And the land is awoken. Look! Buds have bloomed.
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Post by Midnighter on Apr 19, 2009 12:32:25 GMT -5
[glow=purple,2,300][shadow=purple,left,300]The last line of the second and third poem are 1 syllable too long and 1 too short, respectfully. [/shadow][/glow]
too long
too short
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